Friday, 22 July 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

It's that time again, Six Sentence Sunday has rolled around, and here's my next teaser of my novel-in-the-making. This is pre-editing, as I haven't had time to go through and read my editor's suggestions, but I hope you'll enjoy, nonetheless!


All of a sudden, she could feel empty air in front of her. Nala thought this was just some cruel trick, that he was just playing mind games with her, making her think she had a chance to run, only to catch her again, like a cat with a mouse. Her mind stumbled upon the odd noises she now heard. Where were the thuds and grunts coming from? It was a few moments before she was game enough to have a peek. What she saw astonished her.

15 comments:

  1. I loved it, very exciting excerpt.

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  2. Love the mystique presence in this Six- great job
    Dawne P

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  3. Great writing. Left me wanting more

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  4. Thanks everyone!! Glad that it's being received so well. I like to think my high school english teacher (RIP Jennifer Ryan) would be proud.
    (Btw, the name's Casey)

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  5. Great tension here. I can feel her fear!

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  6. Thank you, everyone, glad to see that my writing is being so well received! Rebecca, I'm glad my choice of "astonished" was on the money!!
    A million times thank you to all of you.

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  7. It's creepy, and I'm hooked. What did she see?

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  8. What did she see? Really, I have to know!

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  9. Cruel and unusual punishment that you've left us hanging! Great choice of the six.

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  10. Thank you so much to Vernac, Sarah and Karysa, I am so glad that I chose so well. I was so worried it would be a poor choice. But come this Sunday, I'll let you know what she saw...

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  11. Oh, I want to know what she sees! Good sentences, with plenty of tension.

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  12. Thank you, Jennifer. I'm on my way to sign up to this week's Six Sentences right now, and then you'll be able to find out...

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